• Zahtu@feddit.org
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    goddamn, those sentences are awful. i dont know whether its because they are from an US-american english text rather than a british one or whether its the authors way oft writing, but judging reading comprehension with this is nuts.

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      The above passage, for example, comes from Game Feel, a game design guide written by Steve Swink.

      Steve Swink (and his editors) needs to be forced fed a copy of his book.

      Being able to design games doesn’t mean one can write about designing games.

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      I’m an American born and raised. I couldn’t get that sentence in a paragraph question to save my life.

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      I feel like it would have been better to let AI write it as the passage would benefit from using some em dashes. It’s so poorly written.